Revision
In "The Cask of Amontillado," Edgar Allen Poe utilizes an unreliable narrator who has a tendency to hold grudges and exaggerate drastically along with many uses of irony throughout the story. Montresor, the unreliable narrator, tells his tale of revenge on Fortunato in effort to honor his family motto: "Nemo me impune lacessit" or "No one can attack me without being punished." Poe employs one use of irony by calling one of the characters Fortunato, who is anything but fortunate, and dresses him like a fool since Montresor intends to make a fool of him as part of his diabolical plan. Montresor invites the reader to priase his ingenuity as he tells the story from his perspective, which in turn intensifies the effect of moral shock and terror. Poe does not want the reader to feel sympathy towards Montresor because Fortunato has wronged him, but rather to judge him. By telling the story from Montresor's point of view, Poe compels the reader to look deeply into the workings of a sinister mind.
The first thing I changed was the first sentence where I wrote "...gives the reader an example of.." because as Jodi pointed out to me, Poe is not teaching the readers about an unreliable narrator, but utilizing an unreliable narrator. I also provided an example or evidence of the irony because in the original paragraph I didnt even provide an example or evidence for the uses of irony.
I want to thank Jodi for her feedback on my paragraph and giving me advice on how to revise my paragraph to make it sound more prominent.
1 comments:
I don't really like "gives the reader an example of.." because Poe isn't teaching his readers what an unreliable narrator is, he is using this point of view to impact the story. So, you might want to change it to "utilizes an unreliable narrator." Also, the concluding sentence is good, and it ties into your topic sentence, however, it seems you are lacking a claim. It goes right from the broad topic sentence to the evidence. And where is your example of the many uses of irony throughout the story? If you used it in your topic sentence, I would think you should use it in your evidence at least once to help the evidence with the unreliable narrator to further your analysis. I think maybe 3 more sentences are needed to do this, but overall the evidence and sentence structure were well done.
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